Mine is more PG than MG, I mean MG LOVE SCENE? I don't write MG I am definitely YA and mostly upper YA so um, all you MG writers out there - yeah glad LOVE SCENES are not supposed to happen for 12 or 13 year olds. My head just is not wired for this type of scene! I really found myself either too over the top or not enough! Sheesh...
Don't forget to check out the other participants PG BLOGFEST I know everyone worked hard on this one...
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This is such a stupid idea. What if his mom comes home or worse his dad? His dad LOVES this car. Of course my dad would too. He would call it a muscle car. At least he would if he ever listened to me when I talked to him about stuff. All he cares about right now is some deal he has to get closed.
Chris moved his hands over my hips then started unbuttoning my jeans. His hands are clumsy and I want to tell him to just let me do it but it might hurt his feelings. We had been making out for around an hour.
Karen said that guys were not the most coordinated when it came to this. She said that even if it hurts a little its okay after the first it does get better. I had told her that Chris wanted to and she said its because he caught her with his older brother Dean last weekend. She knows Dean told him that it was what you were supposed to do with your girlfriend. Karen is my older sister and she would know, she has had lots of boyfriends. So many that dad once threatened to lock her in her room if he caught her with another one. She can't wait to turn sixteen. She told me she was going to be driving her way to paradise.
I felt the zipper go down and I inhaled. His hands froze for a second and he looked at me. His eyes are dark brown, so dark that sometimes they look black. It is what made me think he was cute to begin with. That and the lopsided grin he gives me when I laugh.
I nod and he begins to tug my jeans down. He hesitates and then the decision is made. All at once he is against me. His hands are everywhere. I cannot keep up with what he is going to do next. I only recognize a chill on my skin as the air hits me. He slides me down the bench seat and his arms are beside my head. He smiles and it is my smile.
Then all of a sudden I bite my lip. A sharp pain fills me and his breathing has changed. I grab his shoulders trying to ignore it, then it begins to pass. I am not yet comfortable but it isn't so bad. Sweat beads on his forehead; I focus on it and let him finish. He collapses against me and a small smile spreads across my face.
If this is how Karen stays so popular then this will be a cinch.
I like that last line. Kinda sad...
ReplyDeleteLivia - Thanks so much for stopping by. This was a difficult challenge. To me at the young age our character is supposed to be here I could not fathom any other reason where she would so willingly give herself to this boy...MG is definitely not made for Love Scenes! lol
ReplyDeleteThis rang very true to me. The characters are vivid and real. Way to go! I almost felt like I was reading a real teenager's diary. And I agree with Livia--great last line, I feel like it's setting up a bigger conflict.
ReplyDeletePortia - Thanks Portia! I am glad you stopped by. This was a fun, albeit challenging, blogfest. I am glad I signed up *repeatsthisoverandoveragain* ;o)
ReplyDeleteThe last line just got me. How sad for her. Great story.
ReplyDeleteHa! "A cinch..." Oh, the poor, misguided gal. We're all going YA and liking it, I think. I like the internal monologue thing she's got going. Love the awkwardness. Good job, good lady! :)
ReplyDeleteDenise - Thanks for visiting! I am glad you enjoyed it. ;o)
ReplyDeleteSimon - Oh Simon, this was a crazy blogfest! I am loving everyone's entries. They are all quite...creative. lol You really threw us all a curve this time. Thanks as always for your kind words. It is a pleasure to have you stop by!
The pause before the zipper was really sweet. I liked this, wish it had been longer!
ReplyDeleteWell done Courtney. Definitely not MG--but we're all cheating in our own ways. And I love how I get a definite sense of character. Excellent job!
ReplyDeleteFrankie - So happy to see your entry this morning! Thanks for visiting the Kingdom. This one was crazy difficult! lol But so fun, though at times a little gut wrenching to think about. ;o) I am glad you enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteShannon - OH SHANNON! This is completely unnatural. MG does not need these kinds of scenes & yes it is more PG than MG but sheesh...lol leave it to you & Simon ;o) So fun. Thanks for stopping by!
OMG. Courtney. I really enjoyed this. And I was all prepared to tell you how you did such a nice job of giving the perspective of how someone so young would end up having sex. Which is still true, but MAN that last line is a COMPLETE zinger!
ReplyDeleteWell done!!
You are right its not PG hehe..... None the less it was Stunning, Dazzling and Fascinating!
ReplyDeleteI really like this. It rings true and that last line is very sad indeed. Great job with the challenge. :)
ReplyDeleteSara - thank you! I loved yours! Such an interesting thing to do on the Ides of March, eh? I am glad you enjoyed it!
ReplyDeleteLiz (Cleverly Inked) - Thank you so much! Yeah...it is difficult not to skirt the lines with this topic, Shannon above is right, we seemed to all cheat a teeny tiny bit on this one ;o) So glad you stopped by!
Sarahjayne - You snuck in here while I was replying to the others! Thanks so much for stopping by. The last line just slipped beneath my fingers and at once I was satisfied. This was a challenge all right! But fun nonetheless! ;o)
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed reading this and yes the challenge of this blogfest made it fun. Beautiful ring of truth and fantastic end.
ReplyDeleteIt rings true to me that she's not really focused on the act itself. She's letting her mind wander and doing it because she thinks she's *supposed* to. Makes me wonder how many girls think that exact same thing?
ReplyDeleteGood job :)
LK - Oh my goodness! Thank you so much for stopping by! It was fun. ;o) I am so glad you enjoyed it. I am a huge fan of Katie McCabe! So honored to have you visit the kingdom, stop by anytime ;o)
ReplyDeletemaybe genius - thanks for visiting the Kingdom! I often wonder the same thing about the thoughts wandering...I think most girls who succumb to that pressure at a young age really do just go through the motions. I am so glad you enjoyed! Visit anytime ;o)
ReplyDeleteOutstanding voice! The internal monologue really rang true. The first time there's all these things going through your head and you're just waiting to see... Ahem, well, some of us were waiting, anyway.
ReplyDeleteAnd that last line is killer. Well done, you!
VR - It is wonderful to have you stop by! This challenge was crazy. ;o) I loved yours, wonderful. As my friends & I got older and discussed firsts that seemed to be a prevalent theme: the okay, so what next? or the what will I tell ___ when she asks? Thanks so much for commenting! Visit anytime. ;o)
ReplyDeleteHey! Why's it gotta be KAREN that gets her popularity that way? I'm a little offended.
ReplyDeletelol. kidding. great scene.
That last line broke my heart. If her sister isn't even sixteen she'd got to be really young. Oh, it just makes me really sad! But this was really good, I wish I'd gotten to it last night, but that was when I heard about the fest so I had to post. But this one it was just, so...sad and true. MG is so not for love scenes.
ReplyDeleteKaren - Awww no insult intended at ALL!! You know I love your name ;o) Glad you stopped by
ReplyDeleteHayley - yes MG is not meant for love scenes, the saddest part is the real life occurrences where girls like my characters truly feel that sex is just something to become popular and they have no problem giving their innocence away...it is very sad. Thank you so much for stopping by, I am glad you enjoyed it!
Whoa...she and Karen are running in the wrong race. Wow, that last line is just a zinger. Good job!
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